Tone Anylasis
Chopin's glimmering realization of her existence seems both uplifiting and sorrowful showing both her true placement in society and the new knowledge deemed only to her that sits so weightfully upon her shoulders.
Wednesday, November 11, 2009
Monday, October 12, 2009
Sentence 12
THE Sentence:
The fight had made Mark something of a hero, and the whole story was going around school in various versions, all different.
from That Was Then, This Is Now by S.E. Hinton
This sentence puts two thoughts together into one sentence that flows very well.
MY Sentence:
The show had made Sally popular over night, and the rumor was no longer true that she stole the main lead, all a lie.
The fight had made Mark something of a hero, and the whole story was going around school in various versions, all different.
from That Was Then, This Is Now by S.E. Hinton
This sentence puts two thoughts together into one sentence that flows very well.
MY Sentence:
The show had made Sally popular over night, and the rumor was no longer true that she stole the main lead, all a lie.
Sentence 11
THE Sentence:
We ran across the schoolyard, crawled under the fence to Deer's Pasture behind our house, climed our back fence and were at the back steps before Jem would let us pause to rest.
from To Kill A Mockingbird by Harper Lee
This sentence is very complex and shows the effort the children placed in their actions.
MY Sentence:
Daniel walked through the store, searched over the aisles with candy behind the clothes, shouted around the people and went to the speaker so he could find Ashley.
We ran across the schoolyard, crawled under the fence to Deer's Pasture behind our house, climed our back fence and were at the back steps before Jem would let us pause to rest.
from To Kill A Mockingbird by Harper Lee
This sentence is very complex and shows the effort the children placed in their actions.
MY Sentence:
Daniel walked through the store, searched over the aisles with candy behind the clothes, shouted around the people and went to the speaker so he could find Ashley.
Sentence 10
THE Sentence:
from To Kill A Mockingbird by Harper Lee
This sentence has two verbs that help to describe clearly the way in which Jem is leaving the house and runs away.
MY Sentence:
Amy bounded from the house and sprinted toward them.
Jem leaped off the porch and galloped toward us.
from To Kill A Mockingbird by Harper Lee
This sentence has two verbs that help to describe clearly the way in which Jem is leaving the house and runs away.
MY Sentence:
Amy bounded from the house and sprinted toward them.
Sentence 9
THE Sentence:
And then I was in his arms, kissing him, and our tears mingled together as we laughed and cried and held each other.
from Hunted by P.C. Cast and Kristen Cast
This sentence has a lot of repeating verbs and verb phrases that seem to suggest that there was a lot of action found in the context.
MY Sentence:
And then I was stumbling, searching around, and my phone wasn't working as I cried and prayed and hoped for help in the dark.
And then I was in his arms, kissing him, and our tears mingled together as we laughed and cried and held each other.
from Hunted by P.C. Cast and Kristen Cast
This sentence has a lot of repeating verbs and verb phrases that seem to suggest that there was a lot of action found in the context.
MY Sentence:
And then I was stumbling, searching around, and my phone wasn't working as I cried and prayed and hoped for help in the dark.
Sentence 8
THE Sentence:
But almost can be a really big word.
from Hunted by P.C. Cast and Kristen Cast
This sentence is very short in number of words, but has great context that needs no more detail.
MY Sentence:
But truth can be a complete lie.
But almost can be a really big word.
from Hunted by P.C. Cast and Kristen Cast
This sentence is very short in number of words, but has great context that needs no more detail.
MY Sentence:
But truth can be a complete lie.
Sentence 7
THE Sentence:
And the worst part was, if you took away the disgusting Raven Mockers, who seemed to be everywhere, I could almost convinced myself that everything was normal.
from Hunted by P.C. Cast and Kristen Cast
This sentence plus the focus to the middle parts of the sentence, found between the commas, and away from the other parts that seem to be distant from the actual thought of the sentence.
MY Sentence:
And the best part was, if you ignored the fact James wasn't there, who seemed to always miss my birthday, it was almost a perfect day.
And the worst part was, if you took away the disgusting Raven Mockers, who seemed to be everywhere, I could almost convinced myself that everything was normal.
from Hunted by P.C. Cast and Kristen Cast
This sentence plus the focus to the middle parts of the sentence, found between the commas, and away from the other parts that seem to be distant from the actual thought of the sentence.
MY Sentence:
And the best part was, if you ignored the fact James wasn't there, who seemed to always miss my birthday, it was almost a perfect day.
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